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 | Closing in  [E] The walls are closing in, There is no escape you sit back and wait for them to close.  |
| (4.0)  Welcome to WdC from the "Newbie Welcome Wagon" Hi Amber ! I saw you were new to Writing.Com, so I wanted to pop over and take a look at your poem!    You do a good job in this piece conveying your emotion - well done! It is interesting to read - kind of like I'm going down the rabbit hole with you. I do like as well that you increased the font size (easier on my eyes) and increased the line spacing. Both were good choices for readability. I would encourage you to take another look at your punctuation and capitalization int his piece. I think you could use both to enhance your meaning, but right now, it feels like a run-on sentence. In poetry, I know punctuation is helpful for guiding the reader's breath, so ensuring the reader knows where to pause will help make your piece even more inviting. Punctuation like hyphens are also a great way to add forced pauses and give them more weight than a simple period. I think punctuation is fun to play with and can really be used to add great depth to a poem. Thanks for sharing your writing and don't hesitate to let me know if there is anything I can help you with! Again, welcome to Writing.Com! Take care, Emily   "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" E: Join the fun! We inspire reviewers through kindness and learning! Winner of six Quills!  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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