It is my pleasure to read your poem, Demon Came to Our House, and give you a review. Congratulations on your 2nd WDC Anniversary

Message/Theme: The message reveals an abusive, drunken father. The mother took the abuse until finally she snapped. Who she called into existence is not recommended, calling it "Jumping from the fry pan into the fire." Which is not an improvement at all.

The theme: Abuse and vengeance gone wrong.

Narrative/Style: The narrative is well done, explaining in a few words what can happen in desperation. Did you solve your problem? No!

The style is dark, horror/scary.

Form/Flow/Tone/Mood: The form is seven 4-line stanzas.

The flow is smooth, telling a story of what can happen in an abusive situations.

The tone is bitter - exhibiting strong animosity as a result of pain.

Mood - Gloomy, darkness, sadness, rejection - picking the wrong way out of the chaos that marriage has become.

Imagery/Pace: A home where we find an acholic father, an abused mother, who decide to practice witchcraft, thinking this was a way to find peace.

The pace move quickly, leading us more and more into sadness and destruction.

FAVORITE LINE:

Jumping from the fry pan,
she fell into the fire.
Mummy had to satisfy
the demon’s dark desire.

OPINION: This is what happens when you follow the wrong path away from an abusive relationship. She would have been further ahead if she prayed.



Thank you for sharing your work with us!
Jeannie Cheering for Martel



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .