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 The Unexpected Event  [13+]
A woman watches herself in a diner from outside, looking through the eyes of another woman
by Angel
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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The story is awesome, it is definitely not what I was expecting. I like the two main characters a lot. The two murderers aren't as likable and aren't as well illustrated. The first half really is good, but the ending is a lot of telling not showing. There are a couple of places that could use another hard return between paragraphs otherwise there isn't really much to criticize.
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