Hello fyn

I popped over to your port to see what I might review for you and remembered that I'd left off reviewing somewhere in your "Place Settings" folder, so I clicked on the least familiar looking title there and I'm glad I did.


INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:
I enjoyed your poem and the musical feel of it.

I loved that you included a link to the drums version of the song you quoted in italics throughout the poem.

I loved your melding of song and poem.


MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

Your poem provided me with a mini Caribbean escape on this chilly winter night.

Free verse seems perfect for this poem. I noticed that it was for Construct Cup. Does that mean you wrote it in under 24 hours? Amazing! It's a great poem even if you labored over it much longer but to have done it so quickly is an even greater feat.

Your poem is well written, flows nicely and made me feel like part of the scenes you were describing.

My favorite line was: "Each hand a beat that's all its own," ... I'm not sure why. I just liked it.

I liked how you structured your poem.

I didn't notice any mistakes of any kind in your poem.

You did a great job!

CONCLUSION:
You wrote a lovely musical poem that I enjoyed. Well done!

Thank you for sharing your emotional poem with the writing.com community!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler



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