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by FrmTheUniverse
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi FmTheUniverse,
This is a wonderful article. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the article is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the article without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have written about your angst at being single and have outlined one of your last relationships. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)I really felt he can be-"can" should be "could".

You use an emotional style that very appealing to the reader. Great job.


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