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Finding Flies  [E]
A silly story-poem for the Writing 4 Kids Contest. Kermit saves the day!
by winklett in the woods
Review of Finding Flies  
Review by Cubby
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings, winklett in the woods, I am reviewing this today as a judge for the "Writing 4 Kids Contest .


*Pencil* First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

*Boxcheckb* Visually appealing Yes
*Boxcheckb* Easy to understand Yes, and great flow!
*Boxcheckb* Followed the prompt & rules Yes

*Crayons4* Plot Supper time has long passed and the frogs are hungry! Where are the flies? Aha! One frog finds a way to bring them back.

*Crayons5* Technicalities: I found nothing to suggest for improvement! Great work!

*Crayons2* Favorite stanza:

First to write down six [flowers] will win an appetizer prize!"
I've bought myself some time, he thought, and closed his bulging eyes.
Acting fast, he watched them write and slyly hopped aside,
did a poo behind a log and came back, grinning wide.


*Crayons8* Final thoughts: *Facepalm* *Laugh* I never dreamed I would be doing a search on frog poop, and guess what??? *Shock2* I was quite shocked when I discovered just how big frog poop is!!! Never would I have imagined it! *Laugh* This is an awesome piece (the poem, that is!) and thank you for your entry (along with educating me *Wink*) Kids will love this!


Have a great day and...*Quill*
  K e e p on W r i t i n g !
Cubby ")
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