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An Angel's Prayer  [E]
I dreamt of an angel praying... for us all.
by 🌕 HuntersMoon
Review of An Angel's Prayer  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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This one showed up on Random Reads -- and
WOW. Just WOW.
You wrote it years ago, and it is relevant for today ... and it's what I've been saying in my writing, too, that it's human choices that change the earth. It blew me away for the beauty of the poem itself, its timelessness and how our thoughts match each other. And it's superb that you bring out that humans can do even what angels can't, by our daily choices. Great stuff!

Suggestions:
1. In the title, I think you haven't bolded the last letter 'r', it looks smaller than the rest of the type.
2. In the first verse, you have used 'wonderous', and in the second, 'wondered'. While they mean different things and have been used in different context, the similar sound was -- um -- too similar! Maybe you could change one of those? (Just my personal viewpoint)
3. There's one verse where you rhyme 'place' with 'place'. Would you like to change that?
4. Maybe add 'inspirational' or 'environment' as the third genre, so that this shows up on more searches?

Thanks for writing this, it's amazing!

Write On!
Sonali

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