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This one showed up on Random Reads.

The title and brief description made me laugh! You've picked 'comedy' as a genre, you could pick two more genres. The story is quite original and funny, with some work, it has potential.

You need to work on the format - paragraphs, font and line spacing. Also, do run it through a spelling and grammar check. There were errors that tripped up my reading.

I'd be happy to re-visit the item once you've worked on it a bit more, if you'd like me to!

Write On!


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