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 Epistolary Dreams  [13+]
If you, unknowingly, held the fate of a world in your hands, would you like to know?
by Ashutosh Galgali
Review of Epistolary Dreams  
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi Ashutosh,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is full of indecision and tension. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what Annie will do with her unfinished piece. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a woman questions her life path because of the message her new art work seems to be sending. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)You have used dialogue but neglected to put each piece into its own paragraph. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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