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Review #4615914
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 Cat Scratch Contract  [E]
I join the circus.
by Jatog the Green
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hallo!
This one showed up on Random Reads.
It's a second-portfolio I've seen around the site, and I'm assuming we've met in your first portfolio too, though I don't know which that is! *Smile*

I enjoyed this tale of joining Barnum and Bailey's circus! *Ha* Love the way you slip that in! The poem flows smoothly, the verse structure and rhyme scheme (and occasional asides in parenthesis) work well to carry the tale forward. I especially appreciate how many ways there are to say 'cats scratch'. Maybe this could be a reference for people who want to find synonyms of those words! *Cat2* *Cat2* I agree with the last verse - you definitely needed that amendment. I just wonder if you could tweak it a mite so it reads something like 'in spite of my confidence otherwise, I needed this change'.

Maybe some WritingMl - center, font, size, colour and linespace, to add to the flow.

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