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 The Great Indian Farce  [E]
An indepth analysis of the Mythlogical fables in Hinduism
by Sanjay Seth
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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I visited your portfolio because you have a WdC anniversary in the month of June.

This is an interesting article, and has some solid facts presented clearly and directly. I learnt some things reading it.

Suggestions:
1. Formatting - font, size, line-space and type for easier reading.
2. Content - You have some basic facts and you have the argument that the people who you feel should believe these facts are not believing them. Thus, sometimes you get extremely sarcastic about these people. I think your message would be heard better if you tone down the sarcasm, both in intensity and in the number of times it occurs. What is likely to happen here is that people get defensive rather than attentive. Plus, if you disrespect them, they're likely to disrespect you in return and nothing is achieved this way. Remember that faith is a matter of belief and choice, not necessarily logic. Your arguments are logical, they can have equal measures of belief which defies logic but is valid.
3. There's a small typo with the word until spelt 'untill'
4. I suggest you choose 'opinion' as a genre.
5. Minus the sarcasm, with just the facts and arguments presented cleanly, this could rate 4.5 stars. I am giving it 3.5 as it stands now and I'll be happy to re-rate it should you work on it and send me the link again.

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