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You really are good at this style of poetry.
This one tells the story of an alcoholic, once more, in very few words.
There's just one line I didn't understand - 'Argument winner' ... who won?
And -- er -- maybe the impact of the earlier 14 word poem was so great, that I feel this one, while good too, doesn't match that. I think shorter works better. Maybe if I'd read this one first, it would've had that punch. (It does have punch and deserves 5 stars, though.)
You know what happens when you write like this? You get the reader thinking up similar stuff.
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