This reads like a first chapter of several or the beginning of a longer short story. The biggest mystery is who came to pick up Reese and why she had to be asleep for it. It is also not clear why her dress was cut shorter. Are you planning to write a human trafficking story or is this going to be something entirely different? At the end, the mention of hunting makes it sound as if there is maybe something supernatural going on. Your genres are dark, mystery, and detective, so I guess not supernatural.

I am pointing out a couple of typos and mixed up sentences below that could use a slight tweak for ease of reading.

you are holding me for ransom. [comma here instead of a period]” she replies
“It is for your own good[.] [If] if you drink it.[comma you] You won’t remember a thing.”

To answer the question in your intro whether you should write more, yes. Absolutely. This is intriguing and you have made me curious to find out more.