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Busted  [E]
But they are so cute!
by QueenNormaJeanGreeneggs&vegham
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Hallo!
Well, with the title of the folder and the title and brief description of the story, could I have expected anything else? *Wink*

You're right, children are so mischievous and so absolutely cute – with their perfectly plausible explanations for doing what they do! How can anyone blame them for this? If I were the Mom, I would've laughed, not been able to hold back.

Suggestions:
1. Linespace and font size for readability
2. More genres!
3. Correction of the tiny typos in the dialogue that's whats we's been doing.
4. You wrote and modified this a while ago. Now that the contest is done with, if you feel like, I think it would be nice to expand it with some more description and perhaps a bit of backstory.

Thanks for sharing this!

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