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Lost Love Found   [E]
A tribute to the most romantic couple I know
by Whitney
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I enjoyed this poem, with a happy ending! The title, brief description, cover photo and genres work. I wonder if you'd like to use some WritingML like font, size, center and maybe even some color.

You've told the story well. The rhyme scheme enhances the words. There's just one place my reading tripped up a bit – you say 'unlikely' and then 'unexpectedly' in the next line. I think you could make those two lines a bit crisper by saying 'unlikely time and place', and delete 'unexpectedly' which lengthens that line.

Is this a true story? It feels like one. That makes it even better! Thanks for sharing it!

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