I noticed you chose Horror/Scary for the genre, but then you left the other two options Other. The more genres you choose, the better your chances are to be seen by people seeking to read certain genres. Options would be Supernatural, Mythology, Folklore, Dark, Death ... as you see, you could add two more and still more would be fitting.

You have one typo right toward the beginning of the story.
HIs grogginess instantly gone just lowercase that i in 'his.'

The story moves fast and has action at every moment. The apple was a good bit of foreshadowing of what would happen next. Although I am not an explicit horror fan, I enjoyed the story here because it is almost as if some monster from folklore or myth has entered their house.

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