Hi Eileen,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if the boys will have there route hampered any more by the neighborhood bullies. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, two brothers deliver papers while with standing the tormenting of the local bullies. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep you writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.