Hello Rhymer Reisen,

This is the review of your Rising Stars September task, "Vignettes" .

General Comments:
Wow! What a scene. A very sad, yet realistic scene from life on the streets. Between the title, the description line, and the scene itself...I'm a damn mess.

I mean THIS is what we want as writers, right? We want our readers to feel and share in the emotions of our characters. This was realistic, raw, and like a scene from a movie. I loved it.

Technical Stuff:
I couldn't see any errors because my eyes were brimming with tears.

Conclusion:

Kindest Regards, Lilli

***Disclaimer***
The comments herein are just my humble opinions. Use whatever is useful; discard the rest. I'm not an editor, proof-reader, or any of the like. When I read and review, I am reading as a 'reader', to be entertained. You know your work better than anyone else! If I make a suggestion or a comment, it is meant in the spirit of 'helping' and I welcome the same when people review my work.

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .