Hello there, GaelicQueen ,

I'm popping in with a review of this item for "Invalid Item" .

I enjoy ghost stories and this one is starting off great for me. With this chapter, you have hooked me! It's evident straight-out-the-gate that Amanda had a very close relationship with her aunt and uncle; which seems to be remaining into their afterlife.

So, I read the second half of this chapter before I read this one because I didn't realize it was a two-parter. Having done so, I realize that Amanda is a medium since she can easily communicate with ghosts.

The sense of adventure and mystery is already there with the mention on the lockbox and that Jim and Agatha are planning to meet Amanda at the home they left
to her in the Rocky Mountains.

Suggestions:

I'm not going to go into grammar and punctuation, but I wanted to mention the opening. I've underlined three words/phrases:

The intense noon sun allowed no shadows to fall across my path. The gravel crunches underfoot as I walk through the Eternal Peace Cemetery gates.

I would consider changing allowed to allows so that it matches the tense of the other underlined words. 'Allowed' starts the reader in the past tense, then the action switches to present tense.

Closing Comments:
This was a page-turner for me and look forward to reading more - so keep writing!


Thank you for sharing your work.


My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .