Hi Lepsy,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is frenzied. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is one you wrote while doing drugs. The reader is fascinated with the images that went through your mind at this point. They will read to the last word. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.