Hi spill with me,
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You introduce the topic by telling the reader exactly what they will be getting out of the piece. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. The piece is about everything you are going through in your life now. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The lenght is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.