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 |  | Matilda  [18+] Scavenging the wasteland, Max and Spell stumble into the territory of a fearsome cult.  |
| (4.0)| Hello, James Heyward  . This is a review from "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" !  I saw "Matilda" on the list of past Sci-Fi Contest winners. I have the following comments to offer. Reader ExperienceMax with his trusty sword Matilda is a scavenger in a post-apocalyptic world. He moves out into the wild far away from the relative safety of Rullytown. Here a fearsome cult dominates, they had already taken his fingers. Men branded with the twisted heart guard valuable relics and resources from the world that came before. He meets Spell a girl between 5-7 years of age when he kills her father and takes his wolf mask. Can retrieve the fortune he yearns for... Commentary: Content, Characters and PlotMax is part warrior, part Scavenger, and ideally suited for an apocalyptic landscape and especially wearing his trophy wolf mask. That he looks after the girl Spell implies a code of some kind even though he has no compunction about killing people for profit. Maybe he once knew and even liked her father. The Phosphorous guns place the end of civilisation some distance from current technology levels, so maybe we still have time to avoid the end. Your descriptions were gripping and the ending a dark surprise. I had hoped for some kind of happy ending there. Instead, you had a tragic thief standing in a burning forest having just murdered a man. The possibility exists that the girl also will die in the flames now that he is no longer there to look after her. Very well written but a little nihilistic and a vision of a world that mixes tribal savagery with glimpses of advanced technology. Humanity has been there before many times... I found some minor errors. Mechanical issuesAcross the yard a faint orange glow flickered within one of the collapsed building. - Across the yard, a faint orange glow flickered within one of the collapsed buildings. the phos-gun discharged one of it’s barrels - the possessive form of its is its. Thanks for sharing. 
"WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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