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Hello SSpark ,

I am reviewing this story/poem for the following contest:
"Rising to the Challenge! - CLOSED"   by Lilith of House Martell

Prompt: Start your poem with this phrase: "It begins..."
Line Count: minimum 12 lines

This review has no bearing on the outcome of the contest. Reviewing the entries gives me the opportunity to take a closer look.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:

This is an interesting poem and I enjoyed it very much! The formatting is interesting and appealing; very clever and nicely executed.

Reading this made me think of the cycle of raising a family and how the kids grow up and move on to begin their own cycles.

The only line I didn't quite understand was the last, "And ours won't even listen". Is this referring to the life lessons learned and how the next generation refuses to listen to that wisdom? Not sure if I got that right, but that's what came to mind.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:

Spelling and grammar look good and you did a nice job with the rhymes.


Closing Comments:

Thank you for your entry and keep writing!




Thank you for sharing your work.


My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .