Wow! I can see the shape of an S! What a challenge that must have been. Kudos! The title was evocative and made me curious. Good job on leading me on the journey and letting me in on the secret at the end... who them is!! I had to laugh at the last line...what goes around comes around it seems.
I so enjoyed reading this out loud. It has a fast pace and simple rhyme that flows with ease. The two lines that do not rhyme in the end of each verse is effective! Though I see there is only one at the end of verse two. The contrast of the "them" in the first verse and becoming "us" in the next is well conceived.
An interesting and original take on the prompt "It begins" and leave us to ponder on what "it" could be. I like when the poet lets the reader dream a bit and find a connection.
Thanks for sharing your wonderful vision and crafting.
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Greetings SSpark. I am happy to celebrate You with a review on behalf of "Poetry Review Garden [on hiatus]" 
Wow! I can see the shape of an S! What a challenge that must have been. Kudos! The title was evocative and made me curious. Good job on leading me on the journey and letting me in on the secret at the end... who them is!! I had to laugh at the last line...what goes around comes around it seems. 
I so enjoyed reading this out loud. It has a fast pace and simple rhyme that flows with ease. The two lines that do not rhyme in the end of each verse is effective! Though I see there is only one at the end of verse two. 
The contrast of the "them" in the first verse and becoming "us" in the next is well conceived. 
An interesting and original take on the prompt "It begins" and leave us to ponder on what "it" could be. I like when the poet lets the reader dream a bit and find a connection. 
Thanks for sharing your wonderful vision and crafting. 
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