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In the swish of a tail   [13+]
Three sleuths do more than chew on sushi. Gangsters are dumping goods in the black waters.
by Kåre Enga in Udon Thani
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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First Impression Witty and compelling. You begin by introducing your characters (the three sleuths) with a bit of humor talking about sushi (and such *Wink*). What a hoot it would be if you continued writing this story using these characters! I loved their humor and personalities up to this point. *Bigsmile* And the ending definitely left me wanting more. You've really got some great characters here.

Thoughts/Suggestions I found no typos. Good job! It was just a wee bit confusing with the untagged dialogue in the last section, but most of the time, I knew who was talking. *Wink*

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