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Graveyard Cough  [E]
Working for a living should not take your life.
by Redtowrite
Review of Graveyard Cough  
Review by eyestar~*
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Sun*Greetings Redtowrite. I am happy to celebrate You with a review on behalf of "Poetry Review Garden [on hiatus].


*Butterflyo* Wow! This poem captures the plight of the coal miner vividly. I am familiar with the history of coal mining and it was a terribly hard life and often did involve whole families as they had no other option in these coal towns.

*Dragonflyv* The title is so evocative and evokes curiousity. The symbolism is perfect.

*Flowerr* The voice of the younger man is clear as you have him dream of a change so he will not have to share his father's fate. The use of the concept of a "mirror" struck home! I like that it gave him the idea of a new vision. The idea of sacrificing his miner's hat and running is potent.

*Earth*The imagery of the "furnace", "belly", "the curse" are potent and the description of the effects on the coal miner was effective. I feel bad for him and his family having to notice it too.

*Sun* The last line is so imperative and a positive way to complete the vision. It gives hope.

*Star* I enjoyed reading it a loud with its strong tone and effective soundscape as you made good use of poetic tools. The dark font accents the theme well. I thought of the song "The Working Man" by Rita MacNeil.

Thanks for writing this tribute to these coal miners. What a horrendous job!

Write on in your style!
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