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   |  | ruwth is writing...  [18+] I will be adding stories & reflections as time marches on. Take a gander today!  |
| (5.0)| Very nice! Except for certain portions of the New Testament, I don't think I've read a Biblical account of the Savior's life that is as intimate as this one. As I read the story over again, I can just imagine John, thinking about all the events you mention as he slaves away in the marble quarries on Patmos, or sits on the shore, by the Aegean, trying to comprehend the incomprehensible. Then again, this was also John later on, after his banishment, meditating on the Savior as looks back on his own long life. Regardless, it’s refreshing to hear another take on Christ’s life, and from a man who knew him so well. While I don’t pretend to know what John’s voice would sound like, the one I hear in this story has depth to it, and is verbally consistent in its adoration of Christ, and its admiration for Andrew, John the Baptist, and others whose fellowship he benefited from. As I read the account, I couldn’t help but wonder how the Savior’s story would sound coming from the lips of Peter, the Savior’s chief apostle. Despite his passionate Type A temperament and his stumblings, he was always humble enough to confess his sins and repent. I find him so easy to relate to. And what would it be like to see your treatment of the life of Stephen- or maybe even a spirited conversation between him and Paul, since we’re in a fictional vein here. Other thoughts came to me as I read your story. For one thing, this is a difficult piece to critique, not only because of the subject matter, but also because something as subjective as John’s musings and thoughts are not really open to debate, since they’re rooted in emotion and truth and faith. (I find little in the NT that’s not fact). Another thing I thought about was how much longer this piece would be, should you undertake the gargantuan task of writing John’s memoirs, so to speak. And then there’s the simple fact that anyone of us would benefit greatly from the attempt at writing one of these pieces based on any of the apostles, or Ruth, or other Biblical figures. The process of writing this would be similar to composing a lengthy essay, where epiphanies are sure to abound. One final thought. What makes this story work- at least for me- is the fact that John is speaking to the Savior; and though the conversation could be taking place face-to-face or from the distance of centuries, the impact is till the same. Thanks for sharing this labor of love. One parting question: How long did it take you to compose this story?
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