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Hallo!
This one showed up on 'Read and Review', and I'm glad it did!

The title intrigued me, the brief description had me smiling, the genres piqued me further, and the little explanatory note on top gave a chuckle! I like acrostic poetry and I think you did a great job of this one.

Well, you call it 'nonsense' but of course, it isn't. It's a whole lot of sense and deep insights packed in great imagery and neat metaphors. I kept trying to choose a favourite part and kept changing this choice as I went along, so I'll just say the whole poem is my favourite part.

What I like most is the hopeful conclusion ... in spite of it all, life is finally worth living.

My only (tiny) suggestion would be for the last line.
I think it would work better if you stopped at 'break' (that is, delete despite the ever coming night). This would work better for the rhythm, I think, and would also end it with hope.

I'm glad I got to read this!
Write On,
Sonali


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