Nicely written. You managed to capture the spirit of Lewis Caroll's Alice in Wonderland perfectly. The Queen of Heart's persona was spot on and matched the spirit of the Croquet scene it was based on perfectly. It was nice to see the familiar wonderland characters return in this and having them try golf was an interesting twist and the ending was very clever having Alice and the rabbit rig the game in the Queen's favor.

The ending was delivered a little quickly. I think it could have benefited from a little more description just to make it easier for the reader to visualize what was happening. I relied a lot on my previous knowledge on of Alice in Wonderland to follow the scene like with the flamingos being used as club. The cheshire cat seem to appear out of nowhere but then again he is known for doing. The pun in the title of the chapter is fun and overall this is a great read.

Thank you for writing it!



This was reviewed as part of: "Ultimate Trinket Adventure [Mainland]" 

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