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| I came across this poem on the 'read and review' feature. The title, brief description and genres are apt for the poem. The poem itself gives a very necessary message and I'm glad I read it at this point, I needed it! So it definitely resonated with me personally as a reader. Suggestions: 1. Typo in the last line - I think you have an extra 'the' before 'arrives'. 2. While the poem works as is to give an important message, I feel that you could add something to it. At present, it is just saying something I have already heard before. This didn't give me any further insights or any 'aha' moments or any personal glimpses. My suggestion would be to use this poem as a starting point to go on to something more ... ? I am saying this because I honestly feel it has the potential to be a deep, insightful poem. Thanks for sharing it! Write On, Sonali  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 08/02/2022 @ 1:02am EDT