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 Autumn in its Own Sounds  [E]
Reflections on the sounds of Autumn.
by jasperkasper
Review by Kit
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi jasperkasper ,

Welcome to Writing.Com! I happened upon your poem, and thought I'd leave a review. *Smile*

Overall Impression:

I love nature, and Autumn's my favourite season, so I felt I had to check this out. I am glad that I did, as it's an enjoyable read. Each stanza covers a stage of the season, and it uses some nice imagery along the way.

The poem describes some of what I love about the season - the colours of the trees, the crunchy leaves, and the cold - which is a perfect excuse for wearing warm, comfy clothes. It makes me want to curl up with a good read, possibly with a soft blanket.

On the technical side of things, this poem reads well. It has an easy rhythm and flow. Well done!

Suggestions:

I do have a few suggestions, dear author. I hope that you will find them helpful.

Stanza 1:

*Snow2* ...leaves falling of...

I think that 'of' should be off.

Stanza 2:

*Snow2* ...crunch under foot

I think that 'under foot' should be one word: underfoot.

General Suggestions:

*Snow2* Punctuation in poetry is a personal choice, but I cannot help myself - I recommend it. When I read a poem, I find that it adds to the overall clarity and reading experience.

*Snow2* If you choose to use full punctuation, I recommend allowing the capitalisation at the beginning of each line to depend upon the individual sentences within the piece. This would perfect the overall clarity and reading experience.

My Rating:

This is a gentle, pleasant poem. I found it to be an enjoyable read.

I did have a few suggestions, but nothing major. Therefore, I will give this item a rating of 4.5 out of 5.

Thank you for sharing your work. Write on! *Smile*

Kit

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