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 His Beauty  [E]
His beauty shines so bright. 16 lines. Rhymes.
by Demon of Tricks and Treats
Review of His Beauty  
Review by Kit
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Demon of Tricks and Treats ,

Welcome to Writing.Com! I happened upon your poem and figured I'd leave a review. *Smile*

Overall Impression:

This is an interesting poem, dear author. It makes me smile - which is always a good thing! It speaks of such love and admiration. As it's in the Fantasy genre as well as Romance/Love I am not certain if it's how you truly feel about someone, but I hope so! It's a wonderful feeling when we meet someone we fall in love with that deeply.

There is some nice imagery here: the comparison with Roman art, and with deities like Zeus and Thor, for example. They helped me build a mental image of this man, seen through your eyes. And as said, the love for his person is clearly felt throughout.

On the technical side of things, I enjoyed the rhythm and flow of this poem. I had no difficulty following it. There is a consistent rhyming scheme, too. Well done!

Suggestions:

I do have a few suggestions, dear author. I hope that you will find them helpful!

*Snow2* ...striking any pair...

I suggest placing the word of before 'any'.

*Snow2* You use punctuation throughout most of your poem, which is great! There are just a few locations where it's missing - that might be worth a quick fix.

*Snow2* I also suggest allowing the capitalisation at the beginning of each line to depend upon the individual sentences within the piece. That would perfect the overall clarity and reading experience.

*Snow2* My final suggestion is not about the poem itself, but about your genre selection. You have selected a couple of genres - I would suggest selecting a third, too. Your genre selections help make your work more visible to other readers. They also help if your work gets nominated for "The Quills"  [ASR], as they give you more chances to win an award!

My Rating:

I enjoyed this poem. It's creative and sweet. I am glad that I happened upon it.

I did have some suggestions, but nothing major. Therefore, I will give this item a rating of 4.5 out of 5.

Thank you for sharing your work. Write on! *Smile*

Kit

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