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Lucky Day  [E]
300 word flash fiction. A man seeks the help of a somewhat eccentric shop owner.
by Wickedfugitive
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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The title, brief description, genres and cover photo work well for the story. For the layout, I'd suggest WritingML like font, size and line-spacing.

I enjoyed reading this piece of flash fiction. The beginning hooked me well and you kept the suspense going throughout. The dialogue provided some neat twists in the tale. I didn't find any errors.

However, I must admit - I was disappointed at being left hanging at the end! I know it's the author's choice where to end the story, but after the build up I wanted to know the result of the bubble-and-rose apology! So I felt a bit let down, as a reader. I wonder if you'd consider expanding it ... maybe even just a sentence or two of the lady in the shop happy that it worked out ... ? (Maybe she understood that by telepathy ... ?)

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