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Rated: E | (3.0)
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I visited your portfolio because it is your WDC Anniversary.

The build up is good. The combination of the title, brief description and genres led me to believe there would be a twist of some sort, and I read to see if I was right. I was right, but I'm also a bit confused as to exactly what the item is! So while I understand that you wrote this to get a chuckle at the end, I'm sorry but it didn't quite have that effect on me. I was anticipating and then I was *Confused* instead of *Laugh*.

Suggestions:
1. Maybe change the brief description.
2. WritingML, like font, size, line-space, to make it easier on the eye.
3. Maybe name the item itself or give a few more clues so we can guess what it is. (Wonder if I'm missing something here, though ... ?)

Happy WDC Account Anniversary to you!
- Sonali

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