Hello Gilben, This piece is interesting. I'm here to read and review your

What a Pot!  (E) Short free verse from a gen x stoner. #2292333 by Gilben67

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Title and presentation on the page: I have to admit, the title attracted me. It is just odd which made me curious. The appearance of the poem seems unattractive. Kind of a blob on the page. But it is short and I'm always up for reading short poems.

Form There is none. This poem is 11 lines long with long, unrhymed lines of no particular pattern of metric or syllabic count.

Texture, word choice, rhythm, sonics:The poem begins with some fluidity but then despite the long lines becomes kind of choppy. Some very interesting words choices made millenia, hard-assed, poisoned, gambit, chemically modified, centrally-controlled, incarcerated, contravening... these save the poem.

Suggestions for improvement If this were mine, I'd shorten the lines, just break them up. Otherwise, I think the poem could be improved with a little more thought being put into it. This is just one person's opinion, use what you might find helpful and ignore the rest.

What I liked: This poem has merit. It is well articulated, kind of sad and kind of funny and always interesting.

Thanks for the read.

~~Tink

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