Hi Evie, I'm here to read and review your

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The fear of death  (E) A 40-word poem #2292402 by Evie 🏳️‍🌈 write&blog

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Title and appearance on the page: The title is pretty straightforward, I'm unsure if it would attract or scare off your reader. The shortness of the piece is often considered inviting. Most poets will stop and read a 9 short lined poem.

Form: Free verse, 9 lines broken into 2 strophes after L5.

Texture, word choice, rhythm and sonics:The poem is basically 4 sentences broken into lines. It reads fairly smoothly. The interesting words are wrestle and victory.

Suggestions: The basic message is "fear of death can be conquered and if you try and are not successful you will live with the fear until you die." It is a pretty abstract concept and there are no concrete images to anchor to. The poem offers encouragement to try, but it offers no suggestions on how to try. If this were mine, I would expand on what the fear feels like in concrete imagery. Offer a concrete suggestion in how to over come the fear. This is just one person's opinion, use what you find helpful and ingnore the rest.

What I liked: I liked the concept, the brevity and the simplicity of this piece.

Thank you for the read.

~~Tink

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