Hi Huntersmoon, Haven't read any of your work for a long time, so I am very pleased to read and review your

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Stained  (E) I cannot heal the wounds that remain ... A Shadows and Light Poetry Entry #2159193 by 🌕 HuntersMoon

I hate to break it to you my friend but, this well-crafted poem is not free verse, it is an unrhymed sonnet with a hunter's twist.

Title and appearance on the page: The title would entice me to read. Unique and bold. Appearance on the page, obviously, a sonnet. I could see it a mile away.

Form Unrhymed sonnet broken into 4 quatrains followed by a couplet. Though it has no end rhyme, there is a lot of internal cross-rhyme. And it has the added bonus of the first 2 lines repeated as the exclamatory concluding couplet.

Texture, word choice, rhythm, and sonics. Once I actually read the poem out loud, it was confirmed this is a sonnet not just because it has 14 long lines but because it "sings".

Suggestions: L9 remain not remains L11 "are not cleansed" instead of "do not clean" L6 only 9 syllables long, technically it should be 10. If it were mine I'd try and add the extra syllable. These are just my thoughts, use what is helpful and ignore the rest.

What I liked Seeing a familiar name that I knew would produce a quality poem and not be disappointed. Yes it is sad, but when she reads it she just might just try and work things out. It sounds sincere.

Thank for the read.

~~Tink



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