Hello Happy, I happened on your poem at Read and Review. In an attempt to restart my muse, I am on a reviewing marathon and here I am to review your

Self-Righteous yeah not attractive!  (E) I'm need you to be self-righteous over there! #2234430 by Happy to write

Title and appearance on the page. The invitation to read your poem. Admittedly, the title scared me, and the massive, long lines is intimidating. OMG if I review, am I one of those?

Form: Free verse in 23 very long lines.

Texture, rhythm, word choice, sonics This reads out loud like a list. But it is an easy read which surprised me. There is a lot of repetition that substitute words might have made it more interesting, "prick" being a standout. ass-hole, numb-nuts, clueless, etc... Just ideas that came to me.

Suggestions I see this written in 2020 so you've probably moved on but if you are so inclined to tinker with this piece, you might consider possibly breaking it up into stanzas. It might appear less intimidating with some breaks. Walt Whitman's famous quote "condense, condense, condense" came to mind while I read your poem. You actually have something to say but I believe this could be more powerful using shorter lines and fewer words. Less is more, especially in poetry. This is your poem, and this review is just one person's opinion. Use what you find helpful and ignore the rest.

What I liked: I liked the straighforward, no beating-around-the-bush approach to your rant. It sounds authentic and sincere and pissed off.

I hope you accept my review as it was intended, to help you see your work through another's eyes. I actually enjoyed the read.

~~Tink

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