*Magnify*
SPONSORED LINKS
Printed from https://www.writing.com/main/my_feedback/action/view/id/4691208
Review #4691208
Viewing a review of:
 
Hospitality  [E]
A 40-Word-poem
by Evie 🏳️‍🌈 write&blog
Review of Hospitality  
Review by Tinker
In affiliation with The Poet's Place  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Access:  Public | Hide Review (?)
Hi Evie, I'm back, Read and Review popped up another one of your poems so here I am. This time reviewing your
 
STATIC
Hospitality  (E)
A 40-Word-poem
#2292441 by Evie 🏳️‍🌈 write&blog


*Shamrock* Title and appearance on the page Who can resist a little Hospitality? Short and sweet too.

*Shamrock* Form Free Verse, a poem in 11 lines.

*Shamrock* Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonics. This is a very simple poem, 2 sentences in 11 lines. Even rhythm.

*Shamrock* Suggestions: This is a sweet, optimistic poem but with no surprises or words that bring a little interest. The most interesting word is "sprint", it gives a little life to the poem. I I felt like it fizzled out at the end. Gratitude is the active result of thankfullness, I wanted to see it played out in a concrete image for the reader to connect to. This is your poem, and the review is just one person's opinion. Use what is helpful and ignore the rest.

*Shamrock* What I liked I liked the possitivity and brevity of this poem. And yes the word sprint made the poem come alive.

I enjoyed reading your poem. ~~Tink

PS You might like to join us at ~The Poets Place Cafe~ Where twice a week we are challenged to write a poem from a very short one page lesson. The comments are affirming and it is a good place to hone your skills.



*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!.
   *CheckG* You responded to this review 03/18/2023 @ 12:33am EDT
Printed from https://www.writing.com/main/my_feedback/action/view/id/4691208