Hi Evie, I'm back, Read and Review popped up another one of your poems so here I am. This time reviewing your

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Hospitality  (E) A 40-Word-poem #2292441 by Evie 🏳️‍🌈 write&blog

Title and appearance on the page Who can resist a little Hospitality? Short and sweet too.

Form Free Verse, a poem in 11 lines.

Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonics. This is a very simple poem, 2 sentences in 11 lines. Even rhythm.

Suggestions: This is a sweet, optimistic poem but with no surprises or words that bring a little interest. The most interesting word is "sprint", it gives a little life to the poem. I I felt like it fizzled out at the end. Gratitude is the active result of thankfullness, I wanted to see it played out in a concrete image for the reader to connect to. This is your poem, and the review is just one person's opinion. Use what is helpful and ignore the rest.

What I liked I liked the possitivity and brevity of this poem. And yes the word sprint made the poem come alive.

I enjoyed reading your poem. ~~Tink

PS You might like to join us at ~The Poets Place Cafe~ Where twice a week we are challenged to write a poem from a very short one page lesson. The comments are affirming and it is a good place to hone your skills.



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