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Title and appearance on the page. Oh this title would attract me any day. Made me so curious. Centered poems sometimes indicate all show, no substance. They don't always attract me but that is a personal bias. And yes I have centered a poem or two myself.

Form Written in 7 varient rhymed quatrains. Rhyme scheme xaxa xbxb xcxc xdxd xexe xfxf xaxa. x being unrhymed. Lines relatively short with no apparent metric or syllabic pattern. Stanza 7 appears to be an envoy to the first 6 stanzas repeating L1, of S2 followed by L2, of S1 and L3 & L4 from S2 to complete the poem.

Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonics Have to admit this poem took on a totally different subject than what I assumed from the title. I thought it was going to be a fantasy pirate piece for a child. It was apparent from the beginning, I totally misjudged this, maybe because of the centering of the poem, which usually infers a lighter tone and the shorter lines which does give it a little jingly sound. I was curious who "Vlad" might be, it didn't take long to do a 360 and know exactly who Vlad is and to realize this had taken a more somber tone. Words conscripts, smithereens added to the interest.

Suggestions: If this were mine, I would use Stanza 7 as Stanza 1, eliminate Stanza 2 following with the next 4 stanzas as they are, then finish with a repeat of Stanza 1. Honestly, I think it would give it more power. You would only have 6 stanzas and you know what Walt Whitman says about writing poetry "condense, condense, condense".

I liked: I loved the surprise. I thought the concept was pretty well thought out and I enjoyed reading this poem.

~~Tink

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