Hello Bunny Sox, I happened on your "Elaborate Fantasies" at Read and Review. I am here to share my thoughts on your poem.

First impression The title would be compelling to many curious readers. It even could suggest erotic content to some. The poem as posted has several words in bold print which suggests to me, this was written in response to a challenge to include these words in a poem.

Form Free Verse, a hexastich, poem in 6 lines.

Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonics Since the words to be included are all abstracts, there use keeps this piece on an abstract plain. Difficult for the reader to connect. I thought, in such a short space you wove the words into your poem quite well. The piece is fluid and makes a statement.

Suggestions No technical errors given the style of writing. However in my opinion, there would be better clarity if the poem began with a Cap, L1 "In", and placed a period after "overcoming.", A Cap, L5 "You" and a period at the end. My first quick read, I was a little confused until I went back again and realized it was actually 2 sentences with a change in focus. I understand it is a style choice, but there is a poet and a reader. Is the reader reading for style or content? This is just one person's thoughts, it is your poem. Use what you find helpful and ignore the rest.

Overall I liked the message and you did a good job incorporating abstracts into a concrete message.

~~Tink

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .