Do I Am I [E] existential poem |
Hello Spring, Your poem Do I Am I came up on Read and Review and I'm here to share my thoughts. My first impression was curiostity, the title did draw me. Also the brevity of the piece was a draw. The frame, simple, a poem in 9 lines, the But counts. L4 is repeated in refrain in L9. Lines of approximate same length other than L8 1 syllable, but no apparent metric or syllabic pattern and no rhyme. The poem reads like a list. The big question of course is asked twice but, the statements made in other lines answers. The "But," is effective. I really liked "I smell the world is vivid" and "I write for words to be read." I see no technical errors other than shouldn't there be a ? after L4? I enjoyed reading this small piece. Thank you. ~~Tink My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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