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 Do I Am I  [E]
existential poem
by Sox and Sandals
Review of Do I Am I  
Review by Tinker
In affiliation with The Poet's Place  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Spring, Your poem Do I Am I came up on Read and Review and I'm here to share my thoughts.

My first impression was curiostity, the title did draw me. Also the brevity of the piece was a draw.

The frame, simple, a poem in 9 lines, the But counts. *Smile* L4 is repeated in refrain in L9. Lines of approximate same length other than L8 1 syllable, but no apparent metric or syllabic pattern and no rhyme. The poem reads like a list.

The big question of course is asked twice but, the statements made in other lines answers. The "But," is effective.

I really liked "I smell the world is vivid" and "I write for words to be read."

I see no technical errors other than shouldn't there be a ? after L4?

I enjoyed reading this small piece. Thank you.

~~Tink

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