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 In One  [E]
What lies inside...
by greenpan... sleeping awake
Review of In One  
Review by Monty
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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An interesting read. You used the eight words well and put them to good use while capturing rhythm and imagery. I did note that a couple of places the chosen end words of rhyme sounded well when read aloud but did not rhyme, exist to bliss soul to hold then whelp to itself? Still I enjoyed the read.
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