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In the Beginning  [13+]
Daddy, tell me a story, a really scary story.
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Review of In the Beginning  
Review by intuey
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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This is a good story of a father telling his child a scary story.

The main character of the story is a girl fathered by darkness. Even though she had the capacity to love, her capacity for hate was even stronger. She's the main character, though I felt I got to know the mother better.

The main character also had a brother. The brother's trauma of his sister's darkness is clearly noticeable. I believe he could have brought an even deeper meaning to the story.

The setting takes place in the caves and the woods. The story lets us know this took place many eons ago. I won't spoil the story, but it shows that darkness is as prevalent as good in this world.

I enjoyed the story and feel it could be made into a second story showing the good side, coming to protect the human population from her evil and hate. It could also be made into a book. I trust that's how much potential the story has. *Bigsmile*

Thanks so much for sharing your work with us. I look forward to visiting your port again!

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*Heart* Tracey
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