This poem says so much more in its short five lines than many long works. The need a daughter has for her father is prevalent. But the father doesn't seem to notice how much he is needed. This makes the daughter feel like he just doesn't care.
Title and Description - The title and description drew me in. Sadly, many of us can relate to such words as "Disowned".
Theme/Subject Matter:- It's a highly emotional poem. One where the writer's feelings are clearly expressed, and the pain is visible. It makes you want to stand up and slap the father and yell, "Wake Up! Pay attention to how you're making your daughter feel!"
Originality/Creativity:- The originality of the piece allows the reader to draw close to the writer.
Emotion/Impact: - Powerful. Leaves the reader knowing exactly how the writer feels.
My Suggestions - No suggestions. This stands well on its own. Though, if you wanted to, you could make this a longer, more detailed work in another piece.
Thank you so much for sharing your writing with us.
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This poem says so much more in its short five lines than many long works. The need a daughter has for her father is prevalent. But the father doesn't seem to notice how much he is needed. This makes the daughter feel like he just doesn't care. 
Title and Description - The title and description drew me in. Sadly, many of us can relate to such words as "Disowned".
Theme/Subject Matter:- It's a highly emotional poem. One where the writer's feelings are clearly expressed, and the pain is visible. It makes you want to stand up and slap the father and yell, "Wake Up! Pay attention to how you're making your daughter feel!" 
Originality/Creativity:- The originality of the piece allows the reader to draw close to the writer.
Emotion/Impact: - Powerful. Leaves the reader knowing exactly how the writer feels.
My Suggestions - No suggestions. This stands well on its own. Though, if you wanted to, you could make this a longer, more detailed work in another piece. 
Thank you so much for sharing your writing with us. 
KEEP ON WRITING ON! 
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