Congratulations on winning 1st place in the Supernatural Contest with this short story. It's easy to see why it placed top honors.
Title and Description - The title is interesting and pulled me in. When I read the description that Secrets would be revealed, I had to read on to find out what the secrets were.
Theme/Subject Matter:- The subject matter of the short story is well done. It was a perfect backdrop for the secrets that are shared.
Characters - You did a great job portraying the characters. The personalities came through quite nicely. I think that little girl needs to be watched closely, as her secrets may change her into someone who is not very nice.
Originality/Creativity:-Nice job on your spin of a supernatural talent. It incorporates into making a great story!
Setting - Perfect setting for the story. It was easy to visualize each scene.
My Suggestions - I think this would make a perfect series of short stories, showing how the relationship developed, and how the little girl handled her powers as she grew older. We're hinted to believe in the story that she has a sense of superiority already at age seven.
My Favorite Part: -When the secrets were revealed.
Summary:Great short story. I truly enjoyed it. Thanks so much for sharing it with us.
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Congratulations on winning 1st place in the Supernatural Contest with this short story. It's easy to see why it placed top honors. 
Title and Description - The title is interesting and pulled me in. When I read the description that Secrets would be revealed, I had to read on to find out what the secrets were. 
Theme/Subject Matter:- The subject matter of the short story is well done. It was a perfect backdrop for the secrets that are shared.
Characters - You did a great job portraying the characters. The personalities came through quite nicely. I think that little girl needs to be watched closely, as her secrets may change her into someone who is not very nice. 
Originality/Creativity:-Nice job on your spin of a supernatural talent. It incorporates into making a great story!
Setting - Perfect setting for the story. It was easy to visualize each scene.
My Favorite Part: -When the secrets were revealed.
Summary:Great short story. I truly enjoyed it. Thanks so much for sharing it with us. 
KEEP ON WRITING ON! 
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