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 | Trouble Me  [13+] Be truly one with me.  |
| (4.5)| Hello Ophelia Mae Hancock Happy WDC 23ed Birthday! This is a review on behalf of "Angel Review Forum" [ASR] This is only my views. Please use or discard as you're comfortable with.   Wow. Passionate and deep. I enjoyed it. Reread a few times, and each time, I still stopped and reflected on some of your lines. Nicely done! Title and Description - Great title. It caught my attention and drew me in. Your description made me want to read on! Theme/Subject Matter:- How close can two people truly get/be. Reading these words shows you that this author wants to become one with her one-and-only. Originality/Creativity:- Very original and creative. You truly have some great lines and stanzas. Emotion/Impact: - You left me with envying the love you have for your other half. I remember the feeling. It's intoxicating. It left a peaceful and reflective emotional impact on this reader.  My Suggestions - I only have a few very minor suggestions. Please use them or discard them as you see fit. circutiouscircuitous figure eightfigure-eight maypoleCapitalize Maypole  meandormeander  My Favorite Part: -Tickle me with your brush of crimson Soothe me with your blessing of violet Highlight me with a touch of sterling Then growl and bring it all to life So beautiful! Great choice of words.   Summary: I really enjoyed reading this writing. I look forward to reading it again in the near future. (That's a HUGE compliment). I know it'll touch me just the same the next time around. Thank you so much for sharing it with us. KEEP ON WRITING ON! Intuey   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 09/10/2023 @ 6:59pm EDT