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 saturday's bulemic cat  [E]
it is not easy to 'rise above' the tyranny of svelte-ness
by christo
Review by intuey
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello christo This is a review on behalf of "Angel Review Forum"  [ASR] This is only my views. Please use or discard as you're comfortable with. *Smile*


*Reading* I enjoyed visiting your port and reading your writing. Interesting piece. It probably speaks of thousands upon thousands of people. Sadly. I like the analogy of the woman doing yoga and the cat. Nice job.

*Balloon2* Title and Description - The title definitely caught my attention and the play on words in the description, urged me to read on.

*Penr* Theme/Subject Matter:-It's a sad tale about a bulemic alcholic. Probably repeating her days, day after day.

*Flower1* Characters - Nice use of your words in a short piece to let us get to know the main character.

*Penb*Originality/Creativity:- An original work told in a creative way. Good job.

*Balloon4* Setting - I was able to envision each scene nicely as I read.

*Flower3*Emotion/Impact: - It left this reader with a sad emotional impact, feeling for the main character, and knowing that this is all too relatable for far too many people.

*Balloon4* My Suggestions -

*Reading* side ways,

sideways

*Penv* musn't

mustn't

*Bookstack3* clawing,

No comma needed.

*Reading* was there is gone!"[c:red}

there was is gone!"

*Peno* could, not, eat

No commas are needed.

*Penv* Favorite Part {/c]- and the cat,
performing sleek, black yoga in the sun, stretching
(her patience) and clawing, puts a frantic edge on the background music

*Peng*Summary: I enjoyed reading your piece. Thank you so much for sharing it with us.

*Quill* KEEP ON WRITING ON! *Quill*

*Heart* Intuey

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