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This Is Not A Sad Song  [E]
You are always in charge of those things in matters of the heart. Just believe it.
by turtlemoon-dohi
Review by Brian KC
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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Dear turtlemoon-dohi ,

I’m so happy to have your poem for consideration in our group contest. I’m very eager to share my feedback on your moving and deeply affecting poem.

"This Is Not A Sad Song"  offers a free verse shape poem that skillfully combines visual and emotional elements to convey a powerful message. The poem's structure is unique, with the lines arranged in a visually striking shape that resembles an empty house, contributing to the poem's thematic depth.

From a technical standpoint, the poem employs line breaks and spacing effectively to create pauses and emphasize key moments. This approach enhances the poem's impact by allowing readers to absorb and reflect on each line's significance.

Symbolism plays a significant role here. The empty house represents a sense of vacancy and abandonment, which is further emphasized by the cold, desolate imagery of "white-gray light" and "cold-blue shadows." These symbols evoke a feeling of emptiness and detachment.

Emotive devices were employed subtly but effectively throughout this poem. The juxtaposition of the vacant house and the poet's heart on the ground conveys a sense of detachment and indifference. The poet's ability to pick up their heart and marvel at it without lamenting its abandonment speaks to resilience and self-discovery. Most impactful and moving upon deeper reflection. I nearly shudder to think when that message touched me.

UNIQUE:
The theme here revolves around resilience and self-empowerment in the face of abandonment, or neglect. Unlike many poems that delve into themes of heartbreak and loss, I found this poem takes a unique perspective. It suggests that the poet's heart was not broken, but rather left behind, and in this abandonment, the poet finds an opportunity for self-discovery and renewal.

Empowering Others:
Readers can expect to experience a sense of reflection and empowerment when reading this poem. It challenges conventional notions of heartbreak and loss, offering a perspective that celebrates self-sufficiency and resilience. Perhaps, a reader will reconsider their own experiences of abandonment to find strength in self-reclamation.

Important elements to appreciate in the poem include the visual aspect of the shape poem, the symbolism of the empty house and the poet's heart, and the quiet but profound emotional journey it presents. The poem's brevity and lack of overt sorrow make it refreshing and thought-provoking.

Just a Suggestion...to further improve the poem, you could consider these thoughts:

1. Clarity: While the poem's ambiguity adds depth, a touch more clarity in certain parts could help readers fully grasp the poet's intent without losing the poem's enigmatic quality.

2. Expanding on Themes: The poem could benefit from further exploration of the theme of resilience and self-discovery. Providing more specific examples or moments of self-realization could strengthen the message.

In conclusion, your poem is a visually and emotionally engaging shape piece that challenges traditional themes of heartbreak and loss. It skillfully uses symbolism and emotive devices to convey a sense of resilience and self-empowerment. While maintaining its enigmatic quality, this poem encourages others to contemplate their own experiences of abandonment and to find strength in self-reclamation. With slight improvements in clarity and further exploration of its themes, it's possible this could intone message with even more power.

I had such a time reading and cosuming yours words. I'm thankful you trusted me with your poetry to judge, and rewarded me with a moving experience. 5 of 5 *Star* With much respect,

Brian
WDC Angel Army Reviewer
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