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Daydream  [E]
A Naga Uta poem descriptive of a daydreaming process. Winner Naga Uta Contest August 2023.
by Beholden
Review of Daydream  
Review by Brian KC
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Dear Beholden ,

"Daydream"  certainly is deserving of the Naga Uta poem by this talent revealed in the poem by its writer. Nothing short of masterful in its exploration of the daydreaming process that captivates people like me who spent their entire childhood in these little comas. You demonstrated a unique concept with skillful execution.

The concept behind the poem is nothing short of brilliant. It ingeniously uses the image of spilled cement on tar to depict the scattered fragments of a daydreamer's thoughts. This metaphorical landscape, described as "tiny islands on the drive," beautifully captures the fragmented nature of daydreams, where thoughts float like islands amidst the sea of consciousness. The poem then proceeds to elevate these fragments to the status of uncharted territories, inviting readers to envision a world hidden beneath their feet. This transition from the mundane to the imaginative is seamless and thought-provoking. It reminds me of my own small reveries like this as a child.

The choice of the Naga Uta form (which I’ve not examined, assume a form) for this poem is inspired. Within its 15-line structure, this poem provides just enough space to convey the essence of the daydream without overstaying its welcome. Each line is meticulously crafted, contributing to the overall impact of the poem. The concise nature of the form mirrors the fleeting nature of daydreams, making it a perfect match for the subject matter.

What truly makes this poem special is its ability to resonate with readers on a deeply personal level. Daydreaming is a universal human experience, and the poet has tapped into this shared aspect of our consciousness. The imagery of people embarking on tiny barques to explore the "paved ocean" is both evocative and relatable. It invites readers to reflect on their own daydreams, the uncharted territories of their minds, and the endless possibilities that lie therein. For me, it’s like a higher state of consciousness that brought calm for a troubled kid with no friends.

For poets tackling the subject of daydreaming in free verse or other styles of poetry, "Daydream" sets a high standard. It demonstrates that even in a short form, a poet can convey a rich and immersive experience. It serves as a reminder for me that poetry has the power to transform the ordinary into the extraordinary, inviting readers to see the world through a new lens. Something that is difficult to translate to an audience in a written medium over art and film.

I found your poem a deserving and suggested read for other poets, as winner of The Naga Uta Poetry Contest. It excelled in its concept, form, and ability to connect with readers on a profound level. This poem is a testament to the magic of poetry, where a simple daydream can be transformed into a work of art that resonates with the human soul. A soul such as the child left behind. Cheers! Five stars.

Brian
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